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If Only I was a Goth by ~l0stwhispers:iconl0stwhispers:



I want to be a goth, but it seems its so hard
Everyone thinks that I'm just a tard
The money just cannot pay for all this lace
But, oh how am I going to save my face?
The lead just poisons, although it makes me pale
The black lines shimmer as I write this tale.

My childhood so full of colour, now rotten at my feet.
I'm sitting here, alone, at the bottom of this pit,
Waiting for someone to come and find me
So I'll no longer ever be lonely.
But here comes candles and cake in the midst,
A birthday present for goth4you with a twist!
©2006-2009 ~l0stwhispers
:iconl0stwhispers:

Author's Comments

This is a birthday present for by and me. =D

Happy 18th birthday! :glomp:

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:iconh-bogard:
:heart:!!!
So sweet! :D

--
Love is not a victory march
Its a cold and its a broken hallelujah.
:iconl0stwhispers:
Aw thanks! =D :glomp: :giggle: =lady-shirakawa put it up on her account too, so yea. ^^

--
You don't know me.
So don't act like you do.
Don't ask me either,
'Cause I too don't have a clue.

... Evelyn ...
:iconiscariot-priest:
Hmm... since this is a birthday present, in-depth scrutiny wouldn't be appropriate, would it?

One suggestion, [line 3, staza 1] shorten cannot to can't: it'll smoothen the rhythm.

--
“Now me lay down
to sleep.
Mow da zeebas down
like sheep.
Give dem to me
nice and dead.
Me no happy
‘til me fed.”

-Bedtime prayer of crocs (Pearls Before Swine)
:iconrazarelie:
Ha, very nice. <devgoth4you> if you ever come to Australia, I will shout you drinks.

--
Regards,
Razarelie 'Rhys'
:iconl0stwhispers:
Lol! Shout? :giggle:

--
You don't know me.
So don't act like you do.
Don't ask me either,
'Cause I too don't have a clue.

... Evelyn ...
:iconl0stwhispers:
Lol yea ditto that, about the no in-depth scrutiny part. :giggle: Thanks anyway! ^^

--
You don't know me.
So don't act like you do.
Don't ask me either,
'Cause I too don't have a clue.

... Evelyn ...
:iconiscariot-priest:
You're welcome. Check out my journal if you have sometime, I've got a DevArt problem that I need help with, too long to reexplain.

--
“Now me lay down
to sleep.
Mow da zeebas down
like sheep.
Give dem to me
nice and dead.
Me no happy
‘til me fed.”

-Bedtime prayer of crocs (Pearls Before Swine)
:iconrazarelie:
Shout is the term for buying someone a round of drinks

--
Regards,
Razarelie 'Rhys'
:iconl0stwhispers:
Right. :paranoid: I knew that. I just had it buried somewhere in me head. :slow:

--
You don't know me.
So don't act like you do.
Don't ask me either,
'Cause I too don't have a clue.

... Evelyn ...

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